Wednesday, May 25, 2005

morning comes

slight breeze
pink blossoms
quiver.
.....
raindrops
collected in puddles
trap fallen leaves
......
blades of grass
flush
with dawn kisses
.......
dawn
spreads silver
arms - mercy
......

31 comments:

Sweety said...

am first here...he he:)

Sweety said...

R u poet? this is so beautifull with short and small...
raindrops
collected in puddles
trap fallen leaves
nice lyrics......keeep it up..:)

Cocaine Jesus said...

Doh. I shouldn't have bothered should I. Fliping heck this is so cool and i bet your dawns knock spots off of ours.

NicoleBraganza said...

Gulnaz...you have described it so well. The freshness of dawn. Love this :

"blades of grass
flush
with dawn kisses"

Akruti said...

Its here,right infront of me,the blazing summer noon has atlast given away to the drops of rain from heaven above,Well,for now this is the heaven,with cold breeze touching my soul from every corner,Finally the waiting is over:)
Hey gul,do u by any chance stay in Hyd as i do?:)) because our last two posts are on similar topics{the writing is very diff though,i can never reach ur pace:)} Last one on summer heat and today on the early morning rain:) Its drizzling here girl,me smiling atlast:)

Misreflection said...

;) it worked, rain at last huh.. beautifully captured.

Lorena said...

this is so pretty. "blades of grass flush with dawn kisses" i'll look at that more differently now. beautiful gulnaz :)

. : A : . said...

How poetic and gentle this piece was! The words "quiver" and "flush" keep echoing long after you have finished reading the poem. Well written, once again!

:-)

Sue hardy-Dawson said...

Glad you got your rain in the end, a beautiful poem so simple but carefully crafted, my favourite line is
'dawn
spreads silver
arms - mercy'
it sums up so well the blessing of water where it is scarce

transience said...

this is such sweet poetry. short and sweet and girlish and innocent. it could be in pigtails, i'm not sure.

NicoleBraganza said...

Gulnaz!! I just tried out that bithdate thing that you posted earlier on your site. Wow, I cant believe it was pretty damn accurate, maybe a tad exaggerated but what I loved the most was that most of it was all positive! hehe Im so happy now....

mermaid said...

Loved the last line! All things waiting for warmth, for light, for the sun.

Sk8RN said...

How erotic and yet sweetly romantic combining the romanticism of breezes, raindrops, fallen leaves, dawn, blades of grass with the sensual quiver, flush, and spread. Love it.

gulnaz said...

Sweety, you get a toffee for coming first, :) thank You, milady. :)

CJ, now you are teasing me...:) thanks!

Nicki, thanks sweetheart was trying to be honest.
about the b'day: I'm sure it was all true, you come across as such a genuine sweetheart and i'm good with my instincts about people...really i am. :)

Akruti, good you got the rains, i live in a miserable little town in UP. if i were in hyd...i'd have been at your home by now to see your lovely garden....post a pic of the gulmohar tree, please, please, please.

Missy no :( the rain part was from memory and the rest was largely because i was up walking in the lawn at 4 in the morning, 'coz i couldnt sleep all night, power failure too...and then i saw the sky getting lighter..

.:A:., you get a hug for that and a big, big smile too! :)

Sue, we havent still got the rains, i mix up past present and future in writing. Thanks for your sweet words..:)

Transience, thanks...i like the idea of it in pigtails and i'll tie it with bows of pink ribbon, too. so glad you liked it.

mermaidYes and the sun does come and with it the warmth and the light.

Sk8RN, ah you caught me! :)...thanks!

iamnasra said...

These are lovely Haiku...such remarkable images...as I flip the page still the image remain in my mind...

finnegan said...

Yeah Gulnaz! Your poetry is so unafraid to be straight up open-hearted.
I love it for its sincerity and sweetness. This hard cold world needs more
sunshine like this to endure. I love coming here.

'Blades of Grass'. I can't help but be reminded by my all time favorite
poem 'Leaves of Grass' by Walt Whitman.

Tarun said...

it seems everyone is talking about rain....beautiful presentation of words...

iamnasra said...

Haiku...another beautiful haiku..Still as I flip the page..the imge of nature remains in my mind

Jamie Dawn said...

I especially like this one because you used my middle name, Dawn, a couple of times. How selfish of me!

Roger Stevens said...

A lovely sweet poem. And that last word just hangs there...

Neel said...

Gorgeous, just gorgeous!

Geetanjali said...

Love the gentle poetry of this one. Specially loved the lines
"blades of grass
flush
with dawn kisses"
Makes me think of waking up to the suandhi gandh wafting through my open windows, walking out to be greeted by the grass wet from the night's dew and the first sunrays peeking through the clouds..ah mornings can be so romantic can't they?
So did it finally rain? Here they are predicting that rains will be late by nearly a week, and knowing Pune that means nearly a fortnight! Sigh...

gulnaz said...

iamnasra, thank you!!
i wonder if it will pass the rules of haiku but i don't bother with rules, partly out of laziness and partly out of ignorance. I love nature, well sounds silly saying it, but it gives me pleasure.

finnegan, thank you so much...i'm so touched!!
i love going to yours too.

Tarun, thanks, i'm dreaming about rain though it is yet to come.

Jamie Dawn, Dawn is such a pretty name! I know someone who named their daughter, sehrish, which means the cool breeze which blows at dawn. so this one is for you. ;)

Roger Stevens, Thanks, I am glad you liked it....mercy...yes i like that word, it resonates with me.

Neel Sen, thank you, thank you! :)

Geetanjali, no rains, i am begining to fantasise abuot it. lol. the moonsoons start from down south, so the sooner you will get the sooner well get it. it rained in hyd. yesterday, wrote akruti, so you should be getting it.
and hey thanks for your appreciation...always wanted. :)

pincushion said...

innocence personified! jus like you methinks :)..lovely!

gulnaz said...

Pincusion, :) i'm a devil...thanks..;)

Jyotsna said...

Simply beautiful use of words Gulnaz!

gulnaz said...

Jyo, welcome back. *hugs* thanks!

Prat said...

such a sweet piece, with the fragrance of thoughts and innocence.
Like how you wake up smiling on some days, thoughts of a dream caressing your tresses.

gulnaz said...

Prat, 'thoughts of a dream caressing your tresses'....what a lovely phrase! thank you!! :)

IshaGill said...

This poem is beautiful.
raindrops
collected in puddles
trap fallen leaves

This stanza is very good

Isha

gulnaz said...

Isha, thank you so much for that! :)
hope you visit again.