Sunday, May 15, 2005

Murmuring Evening

Birds chirp,
whistle and
twitter.

Dusk collects
on the wings of crows,
homebound.

Crushed Violets
stain blushing
cheeks.

Prickly grass
teasing tickly
Toes.

34 comments:

Joel said...

Dust collects on the wings of crows....I like that.

NicoleBraganza said...

"Dusk collects
on the wings of crows,
homebound."

Beautiful imagery. Lovely poem...

mermaid said...

I love the murmurs of your thoughts.

Misreflection said...

its been ages since I let the prickly grass tickle my toes, you do provide some vivid imagery in the fewest of words.:)

Tarun said...

it's really nice thoughts on previous post.....regarding this post I can say, I understood the feeling but don't have much idea about english poetry so I can't comment much on it.

M said...

That Prince of yours does not know what he is missing..:)

Akruti said...

Dusk collects diff shades on the face of beautiful u..Prickly grass teases u,..it must be heavenly:)
u sure can make words feel the beauty.lovely:)

Cocaine Jesus said...

that is beautiful gulnaz and unfortunately i cannot think of anything more original to say but like everyone else it seens i love the line "dusk collects on the wings of crows". really good line. i'm turning green!!

Shirazi said...

Lovely flight of thoughts.

finnegan said...

Well, all would-be princes are now turning into eating-dusty-crow frogs

transience said...

ooooh, another heaven-sent poet. you write so fluidly, gulnaz. and this piece is beautiful from every angle. thanks for dropping by my space and allowing me to find yours.

Anonymous said...

can I simply say that I fell in love with this one...esp "Dusk collects
on the wings of crows,homebound"...there is something so quiet and reassuring about this...as always your poetry is very beautiful...

Anil said...

oops forgot to leave my name..thats last comment was by me :)

sal said...

*Looks blur*

Taking a peep. Nice nice.

Keep it going. :P

eden said...

lovely poem! bravo!

Sue hardy-Dawson said...

Some lovely poems, particularly liked the glass wall, haunting yet beautiful

Lorena said...

so delicately beautiful :)

Jamie Dawn said...

Beautiful. It puts me right there, on a warm evening... the imagery puts me there. Lovely.

joe said...

I'd forgotten what grass feels like underfoot - thanks for the memory Gulnaz.

Chiquita Banana said...

Brilliant thoughts. Love your work :)

Sweety said...

"Prickly grass
teasing tickly
Toes".....lovely post Gulnaz...nice thoughts keep it up...;)

Pincushion said...

So musical and lovely..and soft like a baby's bottom :)

parikrama said...

Hey Gul,

U express so much in so less words :)

I like the simplicity of Ur verse..

gulnaz said...

Joel: I am glad you do. thanks. :)

Nicole: thanQ and come again.

Mermaid: you put it so sweetly, thanks. :)

Missy: thanks and mae your toes be tickled soon. ;)

Tarun: Thanks and if you understood it, then that is a comment...I hardly know much myself.

M: serves him right for making me wait so. ;)

Akruti: you are too kind with your praise...i wish i had that command over words.

CJ: thanks and don't turn green I'm sure the color won't go well with your dress shoes...heheh...seriously you write better than me.

Shirazi: its always lovely when your thoughts can fly.

Finnegan: ;)

Transience: Thank you so much sweetie!
I hope you visit again.

Anil: thank god, you told me that comment was by you, I was wondering who left such a beautiful comment. I am glad you found it reassuring...makes me feel nice if what i hv written can make somebody feel good.

Woman: thank you thank you...don't stop peeping. ;)

Eden: *bows* hehehe.

Sue-hardy Dawson: thanks for the appreciation, visit again please but the glass wall...er, its the link to my freind Pincushion's blog.

Lorena: yes...beauty is delicate. thanks for leaving a comment, hope to see you around again.

Jamie Dawn: i am glad it did that for you...thank you so much.

Joe: thank you. :) I'm glad I could bring back the sensation to you.

Chiquita Banana: Thank you so much! Please visit again. :)

Sweety: so sweet of you to appreciate, hope you visit again. :)

gulnaz said...

Pincushion: thank you pins!!! a baby's bottom is the most kissable thing in the world i think. :)

Parikarma: thanks for the appreciation, come by again. :)

Sweety said...

Yep! am back again...thanks for dropping moi blog...he he ;)

bablu said...

"Lovely little poem".
Where did you learn to write poetry like this ?

gulnaz said...

thanks bablu

Sue hardy-Dawson said...

How embarrasing,

gulnaz said...

Nothing to be embarrased abuot sue, i once a left a comment inteded for another at someone else's blog. :)
your comment gave me a chance to visit your blog and read your excellent poetry.

Russell Ragsdale said...

Haiku like precision and spirit. Y
Would you mind if I put up a link on my blog to yours?

gulnaz said...

Russell Ragsdale, thank you, i'd be flattered by the link. :)

iamnasra said...

Wow this beautiful poem...such inspiration with nature

gulnaz said...

iamnasra, thank you so much for your sweet words! :)