Wednesday, June 01, 2005

grimy gritty glass



everything within you is gold
everything without you is sold
in vain, i love you, i'm told
damn you - you are hard and cold



....I'm damned if I don't make you lick these tears!
and so she swore, biting down her lip.

34 comments:

Faith said...

Ouuch!

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Just wanna say that I like your writings so much. Keep it up!

Jyotsna said...

Great!how i wish men would feel this way too.Do they??

Gangadhar said...

First time on your blog,Gulnaz!!Your blog is so cute...And very nice poem it is!!!!And I'm sure I'll become a fan for you.....

iamnasra said...

My dear Gulnaz will flying now with your poetry..

Powerful poem ...loved it...

bablu said...

Looks like somebody is too hurt and waiting for revenge.

Misreflection said...

At hurtful as it may appear... to love anyone is never done in vain. You may never get what you want in return but you always get something, often the most powerful lessons in life are learnt this way, lessons about yourself. Have faith , angel, and what is yours will come in time.
Just spead those wings of love and continue to be the way you are..

Pallavi said...

first time here through Anumita's blog :)
Will be back :)

Pallavi said...

as for the post... hmmm another sign of never say die !! :) atta girl :)

NicoleBraganza said...

Loving the A-T-T-I-T-U-D-E girl !!
YEAH!

Anil said...

packed with suppressed emotion...i wonder what brought this on...

sal said...

Now, that doesn't look like gold.. more like bronze? Does it matter anyway? It rhymes better with gold yea. And... looking at the pic.. reminds me of chocolate bars. Oh.. silly me.

Just felt like commenting.

Keep it going.

Geetanjali said...

Whoa - go girl!
*whistles*

Pincushion said...

Gosh, you've come into your own WOMAN!
AND never say die!

Bossy♥'s YOU said...

nice writing...if i were so creative...drats...!!..lol

M said...

Nice powerful lines G...I read something similar a while back..just can't put my finder on it!

Thanks for your comments and support...

Sk8RN said...

Beautiful poem - certainly makes you think. I love the tear-licking reference! I was so moved the first time someone licked my tears from my eyes!

Cocaine Jesus said...

kicking back and with attitude. way to go girl!

Jamie Dawn said...

Loving in vain is a lost cause.
Lick your wounds and move on...

Lorena said...

that's right, misery loves company!! i can relate to this.

so much can be read in you including those photograph...definitely makes you think.

great post girl :)

mermaid said...
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mermaid said...

True anger emerging as lava in this poem. Where's the water? Wait, I'll bring it. I wish I could, Gulnaz. Even the delicate flower can have thorns.

Akruti said...

hugs to u:) and morethan that i have no words,maybe i wish the same.

nomadica said...

some hard-hitting powerful lines that compliment the picture and yet say much more.

small squirrel said...

damn!
such strength and weakness in one.
lovely.
(esp that it ends in strength!!!)

vishnoi said...

am awesome piece to go with the photo! really touching!

transience said...

a hard, edgy, sexy deviation from your usual delicate poetry. i love the contrast in style, gulnaz. and the fact that the verse i so succinct makes it even more powerful.

Neel said...

Yes, very edgy, but very heartfelt. I hope you are feeling better.

Roger Stevens said...
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Roger Stevens said...

Lovely poem. It works with the picture, too.

Most of the comments seem to be about the anger expressed in the poem - but the image of licking the tears is quite sensual. Maybe your comment needs to become a second verse to the poem...

Sue hardy-Dawson said...

Anger and love are all the same really, If I don't care much about some one I can't be bothered to be angry with them. A strong poem and a good friend into which to vent your anger.

. : A : . said...

Interesting and a different one from you. Hope all is okay?

gulnaz said...

Faith, hey that is so encouraging...thanks! I hope you come again. :)

Jyo, I too wonder how a man feels these emotions.

GA, you sure are sweet. :) thanks, keep coming. :)

iamnasra, thanks I am so glad you liked it. :)

bablu, story of this world. :)

Missy, i love you, you say the sweetest things but sweetie am ok, this was sort of fiction.

Pallavi, thanks and I hope you do come again, glad you liked the post. :)

Nicki, ;)

Anil, we often live with suppressed emotions most of our lives.

woman, it reminds me of chochlate bars too. :) glad you commented.

Geebaby, *chuckles*

Pincushion, hehehe :) thanks

Christina, am i creative? ;)

M, thanks to you too baby. :)

Sk8RN, i imagined it would be so. thanks! :)

CJ, :):) thanx

Jamie, actually that is sound advice. btw, it was kind of inspired, thanks for caring.

Lorena, if that is so, then it makes me happy. :) thanks.

mermaid, oh darling, thorns are just as much a part of the bush as the budding roses.

akruti, hugs to you too!

nomadica, thanks for visiting, commenting and encouraging. :) hope you come again.

small squirrel, its true one can be strong and vulnerable, both. :)

AV, am flattered, do come again. :)

transience, appreciation from you makes me soo happy!

Neelthanks Neels for caring and am glad you liked it. :)

Roger Stevens, glad you liked it and you are correct, it should have been a verse. thanks.

Sue, yes one has to care enough to be angry.

.:A:., of course, all is ok. :)

venus said...

hey girl, i feel like this is coming from a broken heart. just last week i consoled another broken heart. I don't know what's with you, but I can say for sure that whatever happens, happens for the best, so live and enjoy every-passing-moment.

gulnaz said...

Venus, this was inspired by some moment somewhere. am ok. :)