Tuesday, September 27, 2005

time bits

rain
whipping her face
a hungry heart

dew
bending the leaf
tear drops

30 comments:

Cecilia said...

...more like tidbits for thought.

This is just brilliantly done. Well-threaded use of words in these circumstances.

feminine expressions said...

oh my gosh, such powerful images and feelings in so few words...

Lorena said...

you say so much with just a few verses. BEAUTIFUL.

that would be me "a hungry heart"
and the last image, so tender :)

Joel said...

This took the longest time to show up on my bloglines...welcome back....

. : A : . said...

Lovely contrast between the two verses.

Welcome back!

:-)

gulnaz said...

Cecilia- thank you and thanks also for stopping by. I hope you visit again. :)

feminine expressions- life is wrapped in lil things. aint it so?

Lorena- i knew you could relate to it! :) thanks!

Joel- thank you and i hope you are doing good. :)

.:A:. - that is the thing with contrast, who can say which is better and somtimes the contrast itself is the 'thing'.
its nice to be welcomed back. :)

finnegan said...

Is this a little box of arranged letters that maybe hints at where you've been? Wistful and lovely.

Welcome back!

Misreflection said...

sad and soulful, don't stave your heart.. :-P

BethInPortland said...

Very nice. I've been trying to write more poetry lately. J and I had a "date" and wrote silly poetry together the other night. It was fun.
Keep it up!

Geetanjali said...

Welcome Back :-)

gulnaz said...

finnegan- i had been away catching up with freinds, coffee, conversation, ciggarettes...that kind of stuff...good stuff! :)
...thank you!!! :)


Missy- just like a rainy day :)

Bethin Portland- thanks and thanks for stopping by, do come again!

Geetanjali- is the sweetheart in the picture you? if yes, then you just stole my heart away! :)

Paul said...

Nice and haiku-like, I especially like the first stanza. A driving rain does somehow make you feel metaphorically "hungry," even though I can't say how logically!

venus said...

hungry heart and tear drop; very beautiful!
good to see you back alive again!

sensiblystoned said...

Hiya, hopped over here from Venus' blog, you seem to have a wonderful way with words. But I have this mindblock against poems and haikus, they never reach me :) Read some of your non-poem/haiku posts. Neat.

Arundhati said...

Lovely! Hungry for more :-)

Luv
Arundhati

transience said...

wow. such a tender, poignant comeback.

Broken Spectre said...

Enjoying your poetry very much.

Jyotsna said...

2 verses and simply beautiful,the words and the images they evoked in me!
:)
how have you been?

Tomas said...

once again, even your sad words have have made me smile in the beauty of their openness and truth...

yvaine said...

This is so sad! Such a few words can paint a really sad picture. I hope you're not crying and are no longer sad.

Russell Ragsdale said...

Wow, such talent you have. Impressive short (but very full) poem! Don't be sad my sweet!

stella said...

you make one incredible return... missed you but the poem is wonderful!

Sue hardy-Dawson said...

Hope you're not feeling sad, lovely lonely words

gulnaz said...

Paul - emotions are illogical to begin with :)
glad you liked it.

Venus- thanks and thanks again for the welcome :)

sensiblystoned- thanks and am glad you enjoyed your visit to my space, never mind the poems :)

Arundhati - hey thanks! that is so sweeet of you!

transi- thanks darling, your words are always encouraging to me!

Broken spectre- am so glad that you enjoyed my stuff, do visit again. :)

Jyo - am good thanks...how are you? you are such a sensitive soul, that is why they evoke those images.

tomas- am i glad....its the best when i can make somebody smile with my words

yvaine- no, i am not crying anymore...thanks...it is so sweet of you to care! i hope things are going good with you.

Russell- awww russell!!! :))) thanks!

Stella- missed you too! danke schon danke schon danke schon!!! :)

Sue- am ok and you are a sweetheart to care!

Cocaine Jesus said...

i'm not very good with this but is this a haiku or just a regular brilliant poem?

gulnaz said...

CJ- i don't like labels either. :)...am glad that you liked it.

Carrie said...

sweet...

Arun said...

Interesting blog! Bookmarking you!

~ Arun

gulnaz said...

Mitzee- thanks!

Arun- thank you and do come again sir! :)

gulnaz said...

Mitzee- thanks!

Arun- thank you and do come again sir! :)