"We don't see things as they are. We see them as we are." - Anais Nin
"my fall brokenby a promise kept"..not just these lines but all of this piece reveals our constant search for that something....eternal i would call it!Am coming by after a while..Hope all is well with you!
I LOVE the way you manage words about life!sometimes it's like you "read my mind"i love this sensation :-)
thanks jyo! it is about that search....am good and glad to see you, i hope you are doing fine! :)
ah, what an interesting contrast to what I had put up! both poems are like mirror images...nice...
Anil- my sentiments exactly! :) thanks!Moon- well, its wonderful that i am able to do that....thanks!!! :)
Ahh beautifull.. love the last line..
you take my breath away! i, too, love the lines "my fall broken by a promise kept..."i am delighted to read you and must link you to my site so i can find you easily every day...
i can relate to this poem. how we hold on amidst uncertainty. and then hope finds its way"my fall brokenby a promise kept."beautiful poem gulnaz :)
'Pushing meunder'. I can relate.
You have got it exactly right! The sense of floating or falling that passion causes countered by the constant fear of another coupled with the relief that comes when you find out the promise is kept! Wow, now were truely talking about some awesome talent! You took me here! Way to be Gulnaz!
Hi to you too, love this particularly the way you've broken it up. on the outside looking in.
ditto what sue said. intelligent and thoughtful.
Very nice! You certainly know to play around with words... Now thts a talent! Any plans of making it big? I would say, go for it!!!When i read this piece, i get a different perception everytime.. Thts cool... Impressive post gulnaz, really...
ouch..... keep searching, but sometimes it's not there... and the fault lies in the one who won't just let go.......
Very nice flow to this poem.Particularly liked the lines,"my fall brokenby a promise kept."
very nice poem Gulnaaz....
anillina______gulnazzanluggulnazzanlug______anillinaamirrorimageegamirorrimaSomething sacrificial in this poem Gulnaz---especially:i slipnails grasping fleshmy fall brokenby a promise kept.Verification Word= finnegannagennif
Beautiful lines gul.....specially "Searching for light in the darkness of your eyes"
Reading the lines: It turned on its axesAnd spewed darknessI wondered about your use of "axes", which is either the plural of axis ~ an imaginary line about which something rotates, or the plural of ax/axe ~ a real object that is swung...from an axis. Since the first choice is a subject/verb disagreement, I inverted my axis and found the convoluted symmetry of the second choice.V.W: znilm
this is beautiful, soulful.
I really like the fear in this one....made me anxious. very nicely done.
you have been added to my links.
in the darkness of your eyes i search for lightGs.. somehow these three lines are the most "romantic" for me.. with deeper meanings too than meets the eye.
Gulanz--I have been to India once and we were mainly in the south Kerela and in Karnataka state at the base of the western Ghats. It was really pretty. I really enjoyed Halebid and Belur. I did not know about deserts though--is that north? Where do you live?
"my fall brokenby a promise kept"I can see you suspended in someones gaze, as if their eyes are enough to hold you.Beautiful.
Falling is part of life.Having someone near to break your fall is part of love.I wish everyone someone to love and who loves them.
Gulnaz, I enjoy your poetry so much. You express so much in so few words.
i love the flowing sensuality of it all. like the words scooping me up and dropping me, and me falling comfortably on a sea of clouds. bravo, gulnaz!
light in the darkness of ur eyes!Profound and beautiful."Fall broken by a promise kept" ....sounds so heartfelt.Haven't been here for a while,seemed to have missed out on quite some stuff :)
Pallavi- thanks! :)feminine expressions- thank you so much! ...will add you to my links as well....i enjoyed your writings. :)Lorena- yes, that is what i think too. :) Pf- i can imagine. :)Russell- am overwhelmed by your praise!! :)) thanks!Bonatellis- ......nice thoughts? :)Sue- the breaks were dictated by the words, seemed neccesary. glad you think you so too. :)CJ- thanks! i learn from the people i read, you being one of them. :)johnny boy- you are one sweet boy! love you for saying that! thanks!Tomas- you are right, there is no ownership in such things..:A:. - glad that you think so! :)Avik- thanks Avik! finn- lol, that was clever....my mirror image with anil there. :)sacrifice, isnt that about surrendering and isnt love about surrendering, oh well what do i know! finnegannagennif = finnegan and his fine mirror image. :)Akruti- the search for light is a primal need in all of us, i think. thanks dearie.finn again - oopsie-daisy, wrong window, finn. :)Nicole- good to see you girl! hope you are doing fine, and thanks! ;)Mitzee- thanks mitz! u made me think with your comment. thanks. :)superflywebpimp- thanks! Missy- gee thanks! :) ah! well, i am such an incorrigible romantic... i'm constantly searching for light. :)Pecos Blue- South Kerela and Karnataka are beautiful states! i have not been lucky enough to visit them but hope to some day. I am sure you must have had a lovely time there. :)the desert is in Rajasthan cheifly. this state is central almost. its close to Delhi. If you have heard of Jaipur, Jaiselmer etc, these cities are in Rajastan. again, never been there but.... :) i live close to Delhi. sorry for not naming the city here, not a good idea, will email you.Mermaid- ah your comment makes me dream! :) thanks darling!!Jamie- that is a wonderful wish to wish for! :)Mridula- you are too kind to me....am deeply touched! Trans- Thanks sweetie! your comment is poetry in intself!! so delightful!:))Samudraa- yeah i noticed your abscence....glad you enjoyed my stuff, thanks!
Brilliant!!! a few words but with so much power... I love it :-)
Gama- thanks....am so very touched that you think so! :)
Very very intense! Lovely.
Sensuously dark - depressing isn't it how a relationship that should be libreating can become the reason for suffocation and eventual defeat?
Your name is now word-verified as "ZANLUG" in my lexicon of dreams.The more prosaic one would be: ZNFEU which at least has the decency to include a "Z" "N" and "U" in it.
this makes my lip quiver.
Yea, I did not think about that. Good thing you did not mention that. Thank you
Must have taken some work to get that right. It reads simply, but has a lot going on word-wise as well as with the images. Nice.
i would so much more enjoy the arbitrary poetry if visiting your blog didn't toss pop-up window nasty things all over my pc.
Can the darkness save her? I hope so.Beautiful one.
my fall broken by a promise kept...Isn't she lucky! the promise was kept!And nothing makes my heart more glad :)Thanks dear for being there through out my ordeal..through your messages..it meant the world to me!God bless..
Anumita- thanks! it was a prayer.Geetanali- interesting pov. :) my moods are quite inky currently. ;)finn- remember turning my name upside down as a kid...funny u shd bring it up now. :)zenfu...now doesnt that sound like food which promotes the zen state of mind. ;)Morgan- am touched! thank u.Pecos blue- no problem honey! :)Paul- thanks for the appreciation, feels nice! :)Jenn See- oh! i am sorry!!! maybe u shd try blocking pop-ups on your computer.yvaine- good to see you! and maybe the darkness will force her to look for her own light. i hope she finds her own light....that is the only one which stays.Pinzi- those lines are hope, its a prayer. hey!! dont be silly now! hugs! and thanks!
This almost seems to be violent. Strange how I get that impression when I read the lines:pushing meunderlowerstill i slipnails grasping fleshAmazing how we all get different impressions.
I can only echo the sentiments already expressed. for sure the lines "my fall broken by a promise kept" are exceptional... and somewheat cryptic... this is all a mystery :)
stan- there is violence in being suppressed, you are right. small squirrel- :) lets keep that way then. :) thanks.
in the darkness of your eyesThat is like an epic poem inside the poem itself. So open ended, so full of images personal and separate to each of us...Thanks for mesmerizing me with your words Gulnaz, I needed that! :-)
Jaxe- thanks! you really are very sweet and encouraging! :)
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