Saturday, July 23, 2005

secret cries



follow the scent of night-flowers to me. lay down now on sheets crisp and clean. my name on your tongue, secret cries. noises in my head drowned in your heartbeat.

48 comments:

the rain bard said...

It's quite profound. for me, the feeling of love or passion permeates through the lines.

btw, could you suggest some pointers for haiku for beginners?

. : A : . said...

Passion runs through these lines. Like the last bit,

"noises in my head drowned in your heartbeat."

Samudraa said...

My name on your tongue, secret cries.........

soulful and ardent...loved these lines,they mean so much,ah!!

finnegan said...

"my name on your tongue" has an indelible tatooed quality. i wonder what font GULNAZ was written in---boldoni ornaments? Verdana? Cochin?

Potted-flower said...

That picture looks like a goldfish.

'noises in my head drowned in your heartbeat'

thats very pretty. Very pretty.

Anil said...

"secret cries. noises in my head drowned in your heartbeat."

that was beautiful...the love that is in these words is something to be cherished...

irina said...

I just love oxymorons, they are so powerful, so many meanings pouring out... Secret cries. Silence and noise. Opposites attract!

Sue hardy-Dawson said...

I love the idea of following the scents of flowers to your lover

Sue hardy-Dawson said...

Is the picture a close up of the inside of a flower?

Akruti said...

"my name on your tongue, secret cries. noises in my head drowned in your heartbeat." Its amazing that i na few lines u say somuch:) so passionate and so wonderfully expressed.

Yours Truly...Conman said...

Some fantastic writers... thinkers out here...
Absolutely humbling.

Pecos Blue said...

This is one lucky man for sure. I remember feeling like this. Thank you for stopping by. We are excited and I am also a little sacred sort of like what did I get myself into.

nin said...

its amazing......

gulnaz said...

the rain bard: gee thanks! i'm a beginner myself...there are many links on haiku, so i won't bore you with the rules. what works for me is trying to catch a moment in as few words as possible.

.:A:. : passion seeps out, no matter how you deep bury it or how you masquerade it.

Samudraa: :) sometimes one feels there is so much to say and yet we end up using only few words....if lucky, those are understood.

finnegan: yes i would like that, if my name were to be taken it better be indelibly tatooed...hehe

Potted-flower: that picture is a fragement of a flower, which i painted and posted earlier on the post about rain. so glad you liked it sweetie. :)

Anil: love should always be cherished, even when its lost. :)

Irina: i feel like an oxymoron myself! :)

Sue: yes, isnt it a lovely idea. :) u r right about the pic, its a tiny inner bit of the flower i painted and posted earlier. i wanted something delicate and subtle and my digital camera is not working, so i did this. hope its fitting.

Akruti: i don't know how well its expressed but i like passion...:)

Yours Truly...Conman: i hope you are not pulling a fast one on me...thanks anyways...:)

gulnaz said...

Pecos Blue: it was kind of imaginary...:) don't worry you will be fine. my sis-in-law was pregnant only recently, i gave her this book, what to expect when you are expecting...was quite good, she said. the dr told her to eat lots of proteins and sugars. smile lots and look after yourself.

Avik: awww.....:))

Patry Francis said...

Such beautiful sensual words. You have a great talent for eclipsing a world of feeling into a few taut lines.

Again - author said...

I was actually...

Sue hardy-Dawson said...

You painted it, yes it definately works

DeeM said...

noises in my head drowned by your heartbeat.
I love that line. so refreshing.
nice!

Jamie Dawn said...

Is it hot in here?

Russell Ragsdale said...

You draw us in with this; we eagerly come, wanting to be part each image. Great, Gulnaz!

angel-A said...

gulnaz, great ... every word, every line

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Mridula said...

Gulnaz, how can you write these beautiful verses so regularly, yesterday I was telling my father how you wrote about the tree standing guard. I was saying I can never, I mean never, think of such things even in many years!

bablu said...

Whats that picture ?

gulnaz said...

Patry: I feel honoured that you should say so, thanks!

Again - author: its you again, with a new name...cool...:)

Sue: thanks....:)

DeeM: glad u think so....:)

Jamie: phew!! hehe

Russell: thank you so much!! ....the image thus is enhanced. :))

Angel-A: aww stop!! :))

Mridula: you told your dad about it...wow! i am so touched, thank you, i hoped he liked it too. :) btw, there are dry spells too. of course you can and i'm sure you do too. :)

Bablu: its a tiny piece of a petal.

Pallavi said...

a heartbeat is the best way to drown yourself in.. SIGH ... I need a hug...

Renee Wagemans said...

What a deep and beautiful piece

Renee

Potted-flower said...

you PAINTED that? holy moley are you talented :)

Lorena said...

short and sweet. i love it.

Dale said...

lovely.

iamnasra said...

U are amazing me everyday with your creative writing...keep it up

M said...

Beautifully written indeed!

mermaid said...

I like the red against the yellow. Reminds me of a broken heart, broken glass against the bed of love.

Jyotsna said...

Imbued with passion and intensity..really beautiful gulnaz

gulnaz said...

Pallavi: *hugs* :))

Renee: thanks!

Potted-flower: i have no talent on the drawing board, its just the colours in it which are nice. :)

Lorena: :)) am glad!!

Dale: :)

iamnasra: i'm glad you liked it but honestly i always wonder if i will be write more.

M: if you say so...:)

Mermaid: thanks...i love the way you have describe it! :))

Jyotsna: thanks and i'm so glad to see you back! wishing you and diti loads of good.

anumita said...

The picture somehow so completes the post. The raw quality of passion is enhanced.

transience said...

my name on your tongue. amazing. this is what makes love so sensual. the tactile experience of its little details. well done, gulnaz dear!

Anonymous said...

Waiting for more :)

Samudraa said...

next post?

gulnaz said...

trans: yes, i like love to be sensual, tactile and yet also something abstract, of the other world. no wonder i have no love life, hehe
happy b'day once again....:)

anon: me too! :)

Samudraa: have been feeling too crappy lately :(

yvaine said...

Love comforts all.

Lovely one.

gulnaz said...

yvaine: :) i guess it does

ash said...

Wow ! That's just lovely ! :))

gulnaz said...

ash: was it? thanks! :))

Potted-flower said...

nop, thats talent.

gulnaz said...

thanks potted-flower! :)

Jaxe said...

Hi Gul!!! (sorry, I've been away for a few) This is incredible. I love the brief but INTENSE urgency of it. Very nice ! The passion is so palpable, I can feel it!