Tuesday, September 04, 2007

loopy

i like you

in the rain

the moon

in a haze

streetlight

trims with silver

blades of grass

at my feet

their wetness

sprays my ankles

i need you

to wet my mind

lightning pulses

silently

i wait for thunder

22 comments:

annie said...

Awesome - felt it!

Alok said...

very romantic ... the end had a sensuous current for me .. lovely

alok

gulnaz said...

annie- ;) thanks sweetie

alok- that is good...:)
romance is the spark we all need eh

Janice Thomson said...

Ooh I love those last lines Gulnaz...they really bring together the meaning of the poem. Delightfully sensuous!

Theo said...

whew. nicely penned. deeply felt.

thanks for your trip over to my place.

Namaste'

gulnaz said...

janice- thanks, so glad you liked them, i was a bit unsure about them but then i thought what the heck, they seemed fine to me.

theo- thanks! :)

samrina said...

Beautiful words...

Hope you're fine there.

take care

Ashu said...

Deep meaningful post.....great one...

gulnaz said...

samrina- i'm good thanks, how are you doing? :)

ashu- thanks :)

Pat Paulk said...

Oooooh, I could stand a little of that thunder myself!! I like!!

Paul said...

Coming, darling...

"Oh" - (in confusion...) "You didn't mean... me..."

LOL, just a bit of blog performance art. Liked it -

gulnaz said...

pat paulk- hehe i'm sure ;)

Paul- LOL, thanks and i liked your performance, err blog performance hehe :)

Shubhodeep said...

mmmm.... nicey... kinda ethereal...

although (pardon me for being flippant)... if it had been my girlfriend writing this she probly would have said she needed me to wet more than just her mind... :P

he he cya around ...

mermaid said...

To be a little dazed by love... now who would say no to that?

gulnaz said...

shubhodeep- i don't know what you are talking about kiddo..;) take care

mermaid- :)) rrright!

Shubhodeep said...

of course you don't.. all grown ups are prudes... :P... he he

Kalyan said...

lovely words...simple yet elegant...!

Juhi said...

pretty...!

Moon River said...

god, i would love to feel it all!
lucky soul that you are.

Lorena said...

ooh, wow!!! :)

gulnaz said...

shubhodeep- lol

kaylan, juhi- thank you!

moon river- but you do with your lovely art!

lorena- xoxo

Devika said...

evocative and sensuous!

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