Monday, February 18, 2008

a million heartbeats to remember

i watch the sun ablaze drowning in the velvety kisses of the evening sky. the music of our heartbeats drowning the cacaphony of doubts...the sweetness of your breath, intermingled with desire...i watch you lose yourself in me and i surrender

....and in that instant i know that losing control is not about losing charge.

18 comments:

-Poison- said...

wow 8->

Pat Paulk said...

A WOW is right. Your imagery in this just melts your readers right in there with you. Hope you don't mind...

gulnaz said...

poison- poison is sweet... wow :)

pat paulk - i am flattered...:)

Monique said...

That is a lovely, lovely little sweet poem.

Anonymous said...

Hope you are ok sweetie :) Thinking about you
Shaf

amrithallan said...

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Amalendu said...

i watch you lose yourself in me and i surrender.....wonderful lines of poetry....

Pecos Blue said...

Very sweet indeed. Losing control is about gaining bliss no?

rOhit said...

Woah! You write good!

Liked it. :)

africanfragments said...

you are so eloquent.strength and beauty. i liked this poem a great deal

gulnaz said...

monique- thanks! :)

shaf- thanks...

amalendu- :)

PB- it would seem so yea :)

rohit- thanks man

african fragments- wow i am flattered thanks!

paul maurice martin said...

Nice -

Canary said...

just dropped by.. you have an ultra readable blog.. can i keep flying by? :)

gulnaz said...

paul maurice martin - thanks!

canary - it would make me very happy if you were to visit again....thanks! :)

Pecos Blue said...

I was asked who was the first to post on my blog and it was you!

Hope you are well. Also I am doing my first giveaway, you should check it out.

Take care,

Erin

Anonymous said...

One day ...you stop and you forget to breathe but your heart keeps breathing for you.. and while your hand stops to write still your heart will keep silently writing for you ...But done forget to dot them down ... you mind may forget those words and wold not come as pronounced one before

Nasra

gulnaz said...

pecos blue - thanks a lot for remembering me Erin!

Nasra - it would serve me well to remember your advice... i don't know why i stop writing...:( anyhow love you for remembering me still.

gel said...

WOWZERS! This would put anyone in the mood, remind us of the mood, and oh how you've captured that glorious time with your beautiful words and wise observation at the end.