Thursday, January 17, 2008

nothing lyrical about this

so here i go
my heart loses track
and maybe someday
it will speak
i break promises
and i am not screaming your name
give me a reason and i will give you no choice.
i guess there is nothing lyrical about this
i am not going to be your valentine.

17 comments:

Alok said...

"my heart loses track
and maybe someday
it will speak"

Gulnaz it had stopped speaking to me for a long time methinks ... I loved the ending


Alok

gulnaz said...

alok - :) isnt it strange like that :) thanks it just seemed to fit, abrupt... a clean cut.

Pat Paulk said...

You have broken my heart, but, it was done with perfectly crafted words!!

boulies said...

Great emphatic ending. This read as clear as a bell.

gulnaz said...

pat paulk- did i know? :) ... thanks!

boulies - thanks! you got it! :)

{illyria} said...

brevity is beautiful, too. but you knew that, you accomplished writer you. :)

gulnaz said...

illyria- i just, just, thought of you!! i love the picutre...honestly you are on my list of hope-to-meet-one-day people!

x.

gulnaz said...

illyria- i just, just, thought of you!! i love the picutre...honestly you are on my list of hope-to-meet-one-day people!

x.

Amalendu said...

nice way of saying this....I disagree...it is so lyrical Gulnaz....

Alien said...

great to be back...!! and am I happy to read ur words!!

gulnaz said...

amalendu- just the music of the seasons...

alien- thanks! ;)

cocaine jesus said...

more words to fill the head and twist the heart. soulful and honest.

HIYA!

Piercing The Veil said...

who says it is not ... maybe bitter but is ... i like it

africanfragments said...

to the point. nice to read your words again

Nabeel said...

but are you going to be someone else's valentine then?

gel (emerald eyes) said...

mmmm- strong

Devika said...

It may not be lyrical, but its is definitely powerful!