i press my face down into the sheets...
the sound of your voice, languidly naked
scribbles, scratches and marks my silence.
i listen to you straining my body to remember each word. i will want to play those words over and again in my head. maybe repeating them will make them come true. maybe repeating them will take away their sharpness. maybe repeating them i will understand the subtexts, the emphasis...all those little meanings which hide behind words, maybe those will all come to me then, for right now i only hear the sound of tears restrained in your voice and am unable to hear anything else.
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Trying to tune out the static and pick up the pure tone of what was really said can be most difficult. You're on a roll, keep it up!!
loved the verse gulnaz ..... voice, laguidly naked ... too good
alok
pat paulk- thanks! your feedback and appreciation is really encouraging! thanks again. work is bit slow and that is why i'm able to post more often nowadays and on somedays it comes more easily than others, i guess.
alok- ahh! :)) thanks its always a joy getting compliments from you!
Ah...all the meanings behind the words we say...sometimes gentle, sometimes sharp, most times confusing. Yes I understand this on many levels. Very poignant Guknaz.
Sometimes we assign more subtelties
To words than they can carry
And heartfelt emotions
Are drowned in the flood
Of implied implicitness
too good Gul...
whats so beautiful is the pace at which it flows.. as u say: taking away the sharpness of the words.. its like a recursive loop u know, every time u read it u add another dimesion to your interpretation...
Gul,there is this thing with some of ur posts.. they leave the person so uncomfortable;
but the reason behind this is the flow; its inexplicable, the sensation which it generates. it constantly ridicules your idea of sustenance.. dont know why but leaves u pensive but soo very close to yourself and again when i think why it leaves one pensive, its this proximity to ur true self.
keep writing..
~anon
I love this, the way words and noise are interchangeable, the way you give words another medium in which to communicate.
seriously sensual and sensuous writing.... i loveeeee...
been a tad busy wid my studies (yes yes, i'm still a kid)... but posted again recently...cya aroun...
btw, hope u dont mind my having ur blog on my blogroll...
Hey Gs, just letting you know that I'm a frequent visitor to your site although I have not made any recent comments ( my mind right now is filled with other stuff and I'm fretting..)
I am equally moved by your soulful writing and yes you're on a roll girl keep it up.. will chat after sept.Take care, love Sham
janice- thank you! sometimes you don't know whether to believe the words that you hear or to go with that, which you don't.
alien- that's true also, so true indeed, thanks! :)
dear anon- good to see you back and as always you leave me stumped with your kind praise, honestly all i can say is thank you!!! :)
mermaid- awww sweetie, you are being too kind too me! love you!! ;)
shubhodeep- hey kiddo would luv to be on your roll of honour and thanks a lot!! don't let this seriously sensuous surfing keep you away from your studies now hehe :)
Sham- heyyy good to see you! so you becoming my silent admirer now heehee :) i can imagine how busy you must be so its honestly really sweet of you to still drop by whenever you can. all the best for your exam! :)
Stark and so well put!
Wonderful.. really.
God, you have no idea how I can relate to this. I wish we knew each other outside of cyberspace. The talks we could have...
How ever so often we forget that words also have color and sound that add lend nuance to the obvious.
well heeled- thanks milady :)
a fanciful twist- glad you liked it and i really love your art!
enemy of the republic- yea i get this feeling to when i read your stuff....if and ever you come to india, let me know....i would love to have those talks... :)
id it is- yep exactly! ;)
lovely words...you have crafted the feelings beautifully, which can be really be felt and visioned by anyone!
He's no good for you! : )
Shoot, I don't know how to do the emotocons thing. How do you do "good natured laugh?"
OK, maybe scripting?
"He's no good for you!" {I say in a jocular fashion...}
kaylan- thanks dude! :)
paul- you are a sweetheart!! (i say it with a big huge smile)
Gosh Gul, you are brilliant. Absolutely in every sense!!!
ashu- heyyy you are too sweet and kind, glad you liked it though! thanks!
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