I adore the visual format of this poem. I can imagine "him" being remembered and feel that fading as your powerful words step across the page towards leaving...and renewal.
anon - a footnote becoz of 'him' losing importance and becoming subordinated to the more important event, that is life. like the footnote at the bottome of the page, an explanatory note and not having more importance than that.
a requeiem is much more than a footnote, its an event in itself, a song for the dead, celebrating the dead and that is not what i was going for here.
i am so glad and honoured that you like my words so much and reflect upon them, that in itself is a compliment! thanks!
i thought the tersness worked with the constricted words... happy that you liked it. :)
gel- you are such a visual person yourself, so coming from you i'm so pleased with myself that you apprecaited it. it was a delibrate attempt to add a layer. such fun to be appreciated so! :)
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Gulnaz, u have a quality of breathing thru ur words !!!
anew! is not only getting over shadows .... u made me feel tht
it has an ingratiating feel to it ...
lovely
alok
alok- ah! how do i say thank you! hugs!! :)
I absolutely loved the first one.. superb!!
Mind if I added you to my blog roll?
lovely words....they are having an effect, just like the trembling sound of the breeze in a forest...!
thanks!! :) and i would be pleased if you were to add me to your blog roll.
kaylan- ooh verry nice! thank you! ;)
a breath of fresh air,..sense of renewal a rebirth,..lovely
african fragments- that is the thing about life, we get so many chances at renewal.
gul,
exquisite! a blend of silence and peace, in its most constricted forms!
don't know whether shd write or not.. still..
he fades in her endless smile
why a footnote? why not a requiem?
perhaps the peace!
~anon
I adore the visual format of this poem. I can imagine "him" being remembered and feel that fading as your powerful words step across the page towards leaving...and renewal.
anon - a footnote becoz of 'him' losing importance and becoming subordinated to the more important event, that is life.
like the footnote at the bottome of the page, an explanatory note and not having more importance than that.
a requeiem is much more than a footnote, its an event in itself, a song for the dead, celebrating the dead and that is not what i was going for here.
i am so glad and honoured that you like my words so much and reflect upon them, that in itself is a compliment! thanks!
i thought the tersness worked with the constricted words... happy that you liked it. :)
gel- you are such a visual person yourself, so coming from you i'm so pleased with myself that you apprecaited it. it was a delibrate attempt to add a layer. such fun to be appreciated so! :)
a lovely write Gulnaz...I feel like I am owning your words...
amalendu- that's an incredibly wonderful thing to say...thanks!
Gulnaz:It is a pleasure to have discovered your blog.
And I loved this poem by the way - straight from the heart and breezy in effect..
done ... thanks
raza rumi- thanks a lot for your kind praise!
alien- :)
These are fantastic!! I especially love the last one.
pat paulk- thanks!!!
wow! effectively reaches my heart. my salute gulnaz.
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