the ghosts of your world
blindfold you
you dissolve in the beauty of the ocean
and submerge in her madness
her dark lips consume you
you lose yourself completely
thrown and tossed and sucked in and sucked in deeper still...
breathless and limp yet you stay...
my solitude
my thoughts disappear
its just her pumping through my veins
leaving me parched for her wet saltiness...the ocean.
turbulent tumultuous turmoil
tears or tired times...don't matter.
we can still be brave and we can still be young but only if we love again.
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i went weak on my knees gulnaz reading this
I simply adore ur metaphors
"you lose yourself completely
thrown and tossed and sucked in and sucked in deeper still...
breathless and limp yet you stay...
Wow! for that ...
and your sign off lines are simply brilliant .... truth I seldom realise I can find again
I want to do it again, however painful. After reading this, I feel brave. I hope you do, too.
You are amazing poet ..I hope your nourish as much as you can into your poetry
Nasra
ringing-of-bards-life-death-and-god was great to see your words there too
nasra
alok- what do i say to that....i have got a huge smile of my face righ now...good? :)))
mermaid- yes i do and i am happy that you think so too...always keep your eyes on the road ahead and the hands firmly on the steering wheel.
Nasra- its really sweet of you to think so... i don't know if my words are any good really i have no illusions about myself that ways...but i feel so good when somebody tells me that they felt good reading what i wrote...so thank you sweetie! :)
oh I think your words and power are strong. I still feel the dry salt on my skin from this one.
pecos blue- really! wow! thanks!!:)) i think its more because of the unviersality of our emotions
I come to be thankful to you for the work that you have developed in yours blogue and to desire good vacations to you.
we can still be brave and we can still be young but only if we love again.
ahhhhhhhhhh.....gimme a tutorial... i wanna write as well as u.....
david santos- i would love to go on a holiday! :)) thank you so much for your very kind words!! do visit again. :)
shubhodeep- thank you! but you don't need any tutorials, you write so well yourself!!! :))
Ofcourse good Gulnaz ... why a question mark ?
tc
alok
really loved that sense of sudden, inevitable awareness at the end. brilliant!
i loved loved loved the alliteration, my dear. and thank you for leaving a comment at chris' place. he would appreciate it.
alok - :)
russell- oh thank you! its funny how these little moments of awareness hit you when you least expect it, isnt it so
illyria- sweetie i loved chris's song and i am so happy you posted it! your blog is honesly my favourite place on the net! :)
and so any praise of you is very very welcome.
Hi Gulnaz
Thanks for visiting my blog and posting a comment on Moroccan Inspiration.
http://patriciagrayinc.blogspot.com/
Kind Regards
Patricia
patricia- oh your blog is beautiful!
Wow wow wow!!
annie- awww comeon....thanks!! :)
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