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Saturday, October 14, 2006
pose one for the camera, please
this is the last time you will be seeing me the way you are used to, the way you know me to be. the next time we meet, the planets would have shifted and i would not be saying what you are used to hearing and you would be behaving yourself. good old mother earth, always in a rush to complete a day, to complete a year would have completed yet another turn. we would remain where we are and yet the distance between us would eat that which was between us. you don't like scenes, just like me. you don't care what the others think, just like me but you care what they think of me as i do and we are happy people. we wear shiny smiles, guarding our fraility, our secrets, tell tale signs like the powdery pigments of a butterfly's wings.
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its not neccessarily about me.
"this is the last time you will be seeing me the way you are used to, the way you know me to be. the next time we meet, the planets would have shifted and i would not be saying what you are used to hearing and you would be behaving yourself"
I love the attitude in this piece. Right on, Gulnaz! I have a feeling it does come from you in a deeper way ;-)
Yes, I can see the planets shifting already :-)
I like the flow of your writing :)
This is nearly, oddly surreal...
:-) I like this one.. in its simplicity it conveys soo much.. .abt time people, and things.... Love the happy people bit.. hey we are never what we appear to be...we try but we just can't be. Glad you're back..Hugs.
Okay I have been lost for awhile just been busy updating LIP as it been long time I did not write about a new poet..Its been awhile since we talked hope all is well on your side..how is fatsing is going on with
Cherie- :)
m.shahin- ;) thanks!
merryweather- :))) merci
missy- XOXO :)
nasra- its going on nicely, just a lil tired...thank you...:)
will check out lip soon. :)
Lovely concluding line :)
e- thanks! :)
Clear and concrete as is everything we imagine we are and we aren't. This was a wonerfully clear view of people meeting over time. Great!
I like this one a lot and can imagine all the shiny smiles and the powdery butterfly wings is a great description.
russell- thanks...so happy you think so!
Pecos Blue- thanks girl!!!
have yu read shantaram..............
yu shud if u aint gotten around to it yet
manu- i read it when it just came out, before all they hype and i loved it!!
lovely ending Gulnaz...
Love that last line and all that moonlight too-I often feel like I'm wearing a shiny smile too
Would have qualified perfectly well to be the opening & closing lines of 'American Beauty' :)
There is something about vulnerability that makes others turn away, like we are somehow defective human beings for sharing our fears and sadness.
Smile for the camera, sweet angel, but know that you still wear your halo, your crown of beauty, even when the kohl is smeared.
what a clever title. what lies behind the smile....very deep poem. although the eyes reveal so much that the smile tries to disguise.
gulnaz, so happy to see you posting.
amalendu- thank you!
Sue- we all do, our armour :) i;m so happy you liked these two. thank you.
Sunny- oh my! thank you!
tanushree- thank you for your lavish praise! :)
mermaid- you are right, we r supposed to be cheerful at all times...thank you!
Lorena- glad you liked it, was wondering about the title and then it just popped in my head....eyes are bloody lil traitors! :)
thank you!
although totally different to and with another layer of meaning applied, this reminded me of REM's 'shiny happy people'. we all put those smiles on don't we? they hide so much those smiles.
CJ- oh i use to love that song!!
sometimes those smiles are a saviour and someitimes they come in the way of stuff more substantial.
hi Gulnaz
enjoyed the posting...last 3 lines from ..we are happy people..
seems to me to be the start, or finish, or middle of another strong poem
we seem to work so hard in most situations to conceal our real selves; our silly, nutty selves; our beautiful selves; our butterfly selves..too easily broken?
best wishes
Mike
Mike- yes you are right, they seem to be a part of something longer. the fragility of human beings is something which never ceases to amaze me.
warm regards
What a final sentence, the image it contains, the imagery you create, the words you choose. Wonderful.
timeintotime- hey where have u been??? thank you!!! :):)
WOW.
everyone already said it: the final sentence is like the icing.
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