i like you
in the rain
the moon
in a haze
streetlight
trims with silver
blades of grass
at my feet
their wetness
sprays my ankles
i need you
to wet my mind
lightning pulses
silently
i wait for thunder
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22 comments:
Awesome - felt it!
very romantic ... the end had a sensuous current for me .. lovely
alok
annie- ;) thanks sweetie
alok- that is good...:)
romance is the spark we all need eh
Ooh I love those last lines Gulnaz...they really bring together the meaning of the poem. Delightfully sensuous!
whew. nicely penned. deeply felt.
thanks for your trip over to my place.
Namaste'
janice- thanks, so glad you liked them, i was a bit unsure about them but then i thought what the heck, they seemed fine to me.
theo- thanks! :)
Beautiful words...
Hope you're fine there.
take care
Deep meaningful post.....great one...
samrina- i'm good thanks, how are you doing? :)
ashu- thanks :)
Oooooh, I could stand a little of that thunder myself!! I like!!
Coming, darling...
"Oh" - (in confusion...) "You didn't mean... me..."
LOL, just a bit of blog performance art. Liked it -
pat paulk- hehe i'm sure ;)
Paul- LOL, thanks and i liked your performance, err blog performance hehe :)
mmmm.... nicey... kinda ethereal...
although (pardon me for being flippant)... if it had been my girlfriend writing this she probly would have said she needed me to wet more than just her mind... :P
he he cya around ...
To be a little dazed by love... now who would say no to that?
shubhodeep- i don't know what you are talking about kiddo..;) take care
mermaid- :)) rrright!
of course you don't.. all grown ups are prudes... :P... he he
lovely words...simple yet elegant...!
pretty...!
god, i would love to feel it all!
lucky soul that you are.
ooh, wow!!! :)
shubhodeep- lol
kaylan, juhi- thank you!
moon river- but you do with your lovely art!
lorena- xoxo
evocative and sensuous!
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