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He said
I, imagine
Your breath
Sweet and scented
Intermingled
With mine
I imagine
Your fingers
Soft and supple
Interlaced
With mine
I imagine
Your lips
Slightly parted
Waiting
For mine
I said
Sweet sir
Your imagination
Flows like the
Rhine
But I’ll never
Be thine
So go and suckle
On
Gherkins
Pickled in
Brine
Fuchsia chiffon dress
Handkerchief hemline
Only for 55
Prada gloves
Sumptuous
merely 55
Slim volume
Of 18th century verse
To be had for 55
Shortbread
With aromatic coffee
Just 55
Mobile recharge
Also available
For 55
Tickets to
Dharamsla
Can be arranged
For 55
Rock to
Coldplay
At 55
Pretty woman
At Hour by 55
I will love you for reasons more than 55
I will love you in ways more than 55
I will love you for years more than 55, god willing, health permitting
But if you mess with me, I will undo you in ways far more than 55
Your pieces will swish with uncle Corleone’s fishes
I, imagine
Your breath
Sweet and scented
Intermingled
With mine
I imagine
Your fingers
Soft and supple
Interlaced
With mine
I imagine
Your lips
Slightly parted
Waiting
For mine
I said
Sweet sir
Your imagination
Flows like the
Rhine
But I’ll never
Be thine
So go and suckle
On
Gherkins
Pickled in
Brine
Fuchsia chiffon dress
Handkerchief hemline
Only for 55
Prada gloves
Sumptuous
merely 55
Slim volume
Of 18th century verse
To be had for 55
Shortbread
With aromatic coffee
Just 55
Mobile recharge
Also available
For 55
Tickets to
Dharamsla
Can be arranged
For 55
Rock to
Coldplay
At 55
Pretty woman
At Hour by 55
I will love you for reasons more than 55
I will love you in ways more than 55
I will love you for years more than 55, god willing, health permitting
But if you mess with me, I will undo you in ways far more than 55
Your pieces will swish with uncle Corleone’s fishes
27 comments:
HAHA! I loved this highly coercive warning! Good refusal. You are not one to mess with. What he said sounded like a tantric technique which involves the mingling of the spirits as one hovers over their lover teasingly without touching. Only breath would travers the space between to communicate, though your words are far more explicit, and you dissolve his imagination in one quick stroke while giving him something to think about.
Oh my god! i love this! i love the turn it takes. very, very cool Gulnaz!
Cool!
Really liked this!
One good writer!
Oh - I Liketh! Very Much!
sometimes I think you're just a twisted poet filled with hate.
Hey Tiger ..I hope you have the support of the mob on this one.. :)
Careful now....
Whoosh! I felt my hair fly back with the last line - superbly done.
First of all anon, I think you may be filled with hate. Help me understand how Glunaz' lovely words make you think of hate? (This ought to be interesting...) And why remain anon, if you have nothing to hide???
Gulnaz, my dear, brilliant, once again:)
sirbarrett- i hope it was not too offensive, hehe. :)
DeeM- oh just your regular ups and downs of life, am glad you liked it ;)
Gautami- awww!! you are sweet!! thanks!
Geetanjali- am glad my young lady it meets with enjoyment in your pretty mind for i was unsure about the parts which are so kind. hehe
Anon- you have me intrigued....it seems you are a regular visitor but it also seems that you do not like what i write so i wander why you visit this space at all. well, somehow the idea of being a 'twisted poet filled with hate' is not too bad, quite dramatic and grand, you are making too much out of me, am not worthy of your interest. :) am sorry if i have offended you in anyway.
Missy- bruahaha! :))
RuksaK- thanks, glad you liked it! :)
Mermaid- thanks for standing up for me! :) it doesnt matter...but yeah even i'm curious.
thanks....you are just too kind to me. :)
No, definitely not too offensive! Bring on the offense! It was expressive! I enjoyed it. I think people need a good fight, or at least the threat of one. Very human, playful, witty, curious, and adventurous. I think the goal seems stronger to love properly, when someone demands it with respect. That is hot. :)
Good humour twists in each of them. I like this new style.
:-)
Thanks for taking it up. Have added this as a link to my 55 word post.
Very uniquely done!!!! and lsat but not the least...***I will love you for reasons more than 55
I will love you in ways more than 55
I will love you for years more than 55, god willing, health permitting
But if you mess with me, I will undo you in ways far more than 55
Your pieces will swish with uncle Corleone’s fishes***Loved this artistic warning...:)
Hmmm.. I wonder... I would like to explore the 56th reason and the 56th way - but ofcourse in the 56th year... till then I am busy!
Hmmmm. Acid tongue spits its vitriol. Thank Christ I'm not 55.
This is what I'd say, Cool shit! I like it!
Guess what, it sorta reminded me of chicken 65... okay,okay, I'm kidding.
Have fun, love.
Wow, someone's gone on a 55 marathon! But I liked the second one the most... and please tell me, where can we buy Prada gloves for just 55??
Hi Gulnaz,
Re. 3times55, I tried to post a comment but for some reason couldn't - some technical glitch I guess, never happened before. I was just going to say the following - feel free to paste it to your comments if you want -
That was definitely interesting and different! I do have some concerns for your relationships though - raking guys with you nails till they bleed, locking them in cages. And here in "3times," you do sound quite stern and demanding.
What about Kenny Rogers' "Three Times a Lady?" Every listen to that? It might mellow you out. I don't know if he used 55 words or not.
Of course I'm kidding, and like your stuff...
Paul
Tomas- do i do that...awww. :) but well, you like that, so....:) thanks!! hugs!
sirbarrett- thanks, i was begining to think maybe i made a mistake. :) and you are right, its not good to allow yourself to be treated poorly. ;)
.:A:. - mission accomplished. :)
sorry i forgot to add the link to your post, will do.
southpaw- well now! :))
thanks!
Just a Human- well since i was limited to 55 but then why stop at 56. :) keep coming. :))
CJ- oooh was i that bad! ;)
woman- what is chicken 65? glad you liked it, was in a stupid mood. :)
Casablanca- hehe have been reading the 55-worders by others and boy am so impressed! still, glad you liked my silly stuff and hey in the prada one, i omitted the units of currency, dollars, dimes, cents, centimes, minutes, paise...:)
Paul- sometimes blogger acts up and really am such an angel, all velvet and soft purrs but well i got my sharp side too. ;)
am glad you like my stuff, thanks.
i am welcomed back by such mastery. wonderful, gulnaz. the art lives in you.
lol!...such fun this poem was to read...especially the last line...damn good! an interesting take on the 55 word meme...
Really good punchline funny,
Ramchi- pacino punch...that's a cool name for somthing made from vodka and all the rest of the stuff littering the bar, better get a copyright on that one buddy. :) thanks!
transi- oh sweetie!!! what can i say, you are the sweetest!! mwaaah!
Anil- hehe am a funny gal!
Sue- heeehee, made me laugh too and i had a de niro-meets-pacino-smirk on my face as i wrote it. :)
finn- LMAO!! your comments always justify my awaiting them. :))
I like it when u proclaimed:
"I will love you for reasons more than 55
I will love you in ways more than 55
I will love you for years more than 55, god willing, health permitting"
beautiful.. just cool !!
Venus, Pallavi- thanks guys!! :)
WOW! Sense of humor and wit combined with superb writing. I'm hooked!
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