tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-11421541.post111675204927441087..comments2023-10-18T14:17:04.846+05:30Comments on ~Apple Pathways~: small-town promenadegulnazhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/04303326222747011474noreply@blogger.comBlogger15125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-11421541.post-1117224037664780122005-05-28T01:30:00.000+05:302005-05-28T01:30:00.000+05:30it is a beach is a beach... NICE (the city) the be...it is a beach is a beach... NICE (the city) the beach..Nav Ahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07852151170668464776noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-11421541.post-1116935746832820002005-05-24T17:25:00.000+05:302005-05-24T17:25:00.000+05:30Roger Stevens, thank you! thanks also for your su...<B>Roger Stevens</B>, thank you! thanks also for your suggestions...makes me feel good. it is just that i don't know about these things (beats, metere etc). these verses are like snapshots of what i saw and felt and meant to be like stand-alone tubes. however i agree 100% that together when they are read, something is amiss, glad you pointed it out. :) <BR/><BR/><B>Lorena</B>, thanks, glad could it paint so and yes watermelons are heavenly! :)<BR/><BR/><B>Laura</B>, yes i liked it too....:) thanks for leaving a comment,come by again. :)gulnazhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04303326222747011474noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-11421541.post-1116902938530183862005-05-24T08:18:00.000+05:302005-05-24T08:18:00.000+05:30this place you described makes me want to be there...this place you described makes me want to be there and take it all in. i look forward to watermelon during the summer :)Lorenahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07167719280821161695noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-11421541.post-1116883854474622072005-05-24T03:00:00.000+05:302005-05-24T03:00:00.000+05:30Lovely poem.You could think about adding another l...Lovely poem.<BR/><BR/>You could think about adding another layer by regulating the rhythm. For example verses 2,3 and 4 have four beats, Verses 6 and 7 have two but the other two verses have five and three. The way you use rhythm can add or subtract from the feeling and power of a poem.Roger Stevenshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08393920954647379508noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-11421541.post-1116853425153736122005-05-23T18:33:00.000+05:302005-05-23T18:33:00.000+05:30Jamie, a feast for the senses. :) though it wasn't...<B>Jamie</B>, a feast for the senses. :) though it wasn't a fair, just an evening in the part of the city where people come for ice-cream, kind of a town centre. <BR/><BR/><B>transience</B>, thanks! ;)...there is something sensual abuot summer.<BR/><BR/><B>finnegan</B>, thank you...its all these pictures which remain in my head.<BR/><BR/>the heat sorts of brings everything to life...sharpens the senses and the sharp colors are, i think, our efforts to strike out at the heat itself.<BR/>brazil...would like to go there somewhere but then i like to go everywhere. :)<BR/><BR/><B>Geetanjali</B>yes naturals!!! i loved it, in fact once had someone bring it out down all the way here and i remember it was so frozen, finished it within an hour, spoon by spoon. i remember eating it, late at night, sitting by the window when everyone was asleep and listening to the sounds of that great city of ours...you sure bought on memories with that one. :) thanks and yes faluda kulfis are mmmmmmm. ;)<BR/><BR/><B>CJ</B>, it really is a kaleidoscope...how i wish i could portray all its colours...there are many...pastels to gaudy hues..to rich emeralds to muddy browns! its not easy to fall in love with it but one does eventually, with all its stench and scent too. thanks CJ...you do flatter me...and get a scoop...make that two.gulnazhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04303326222747011474noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-11421541.post-1116845445696838432005-05-23T16:20:00.000+05:302005-05-23T16:20:00.000+05:30what a kaliedescopic vision of india, for surely t...what a kaliedescopic vision of india, for surely this is she, that smacks you squarely in the eye when you read these punchy lines. and each line and each verse has that wonderfully energetic vibe that takes hold of your wrist and transports you smack bang centre into the market place with all that fantastic colour and sound and scent.<BR/><BR/>i wanna ice cream. NOW!!!<BR/><BR/>great poem Gulnaz.Russell CJ Duffyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00519621428036481426noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-11421541.post-1116829381456944542005-05-23T11:53:00.000+05:302005-05-23T11:53:00.000+05:30Hey I don't know if you've been to Bbay and to Nat...Hey I don't know if you've been to Bbay and to Naturals Juhu - but this poem took me back there immediately!<BR/><BR/>Beautiful word pictures Gulnaz and very summery! Btw aren't the best 'icecreams' those kulfis you get on the road? Slurp!G Shrivastavahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11067631774356885766noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-11421541.post-1116808255106167082005-05-23T06:00:00.000+05:302005-05-23T06:00:00.000+05:30sizzling summers = sensual imageryi love the pictu...sizzling summers = sensual imagery<BR/><BR/>i love the pictures i see in my head after reading every verse, gulnaz! you write truly inspiring poetry.{illyria}https://www.blogger.com/profile/11333497030751042143noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-11421541.post-1116800792864745882005-05-23T03:56:00.000+05:302005-05-23T03:56:00.000+05:30Summer parades and fairs are so much fun. The sig...Summer parades and fairs are so much fun. The sights, colors, foods, etc.... Yummmmmm.Jamie Dawnhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11036600186909466411noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-11421541.post-1116790547173151362005-05-23T01:05:00.000+05:302005-05-23T01:05:00.000+05:30.:A:., really? :) thanks, am glad you like it so. ...<B>.:A:.</B>, really? :) thanks, am glad you like it so. ;)<BR/><BR/><B>mermaid</B>, thanks darling! :)<BR/><BR/><B>Joel</B>, flattered that you shoudl like it, thank you. :)<BR/><BR/><B>Missy</B>, i like the smell of flowers in a room, thanks for appreciating! :)<BR/><BR/><B>Nicole</B>, yes nicole me too. i sometimes put jasmine flowers in a bowl, in my room. i don't wear them in my hair though...got shortish hair.gulnazhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04303326222747011474noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-11421541.post-1116778404444603762005-05-22T21:43:00.000+05:302005-05-22T21:43:00.000+05:30"Little boysselling heart balloonsto little men in..."Little boys<BR/>selling heart balloons<BR/>to little men in big cars."<BR/><BR/>There is so much in this stanza. I can go on reading it again and again and again.<BR/><BR/>:-). : A : .https://www.blogger.com/profile/04410256917258728976noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-11421541.post-1116777380171227522005-05-22T21:26:00.000+05:302005-05-22T21:26:00.000+05:30Such description in a gentle but powerful voice.Such description in a gentle but powerful voice.mermaidhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15895749686844178804noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-11421541.post-1116776326276015132005-05-22T21:08:00.000+05:302005-05-22T21:08:00.000+05:30I love the first verse paragraph. "In balloon col...I love the first verse paragraph. "In balloon color dresses". Nice, very nice image.Joelhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03203073725903325863noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-11421541.post-1116761901564479142005-05-22T17:08:00.000+05:302005-05-22T17:08:00.000+05:30Interesting GS, Verse: Little boys....., wonder wh...Interesting GS, Verse: Little boys....., wonder why the use of words such as heart, litle, big cars. :)..Of course I have my own ideas on why you chose these words.<BR/><BR/>ps I love jasmine too, playing in my hair, lovely phrase.Misreflectionhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17611456301939588360noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-11421541.post-1116755646872559432005-05-22T15:24:00.000+05:302005-05-22T15:24:00.000+05:30"Strings of jasminePlaying In dark hair"I just lov..."Strings of jasmine<BR/>Playing <BR/>In dark hair"<BR/><BR/>I just love love love the smell of Jasmine!Nicole Braganzahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00710570141127957898noreply@blogger.com